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<p style="margin: 0pt 0pt 0.0001pt; font-family: Calibri; font-size: 10.5pt; text-align: justify;"><span style="font-family: 宋体; font-size: 10.5000pt;"><span style="font-family: Calibri;">Hello</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">，我是<a href="https://www.compassedu.hk/" target="_blank" rel="noopener">指南者留学</a>美研部门的文书老师</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">Amanda</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">。</span></span></p>
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<p style="margin: 0pt 0pt 0.0001pt; font-family: Calibri; font-size: 10.5pt; text-align: justify;"><span style="font-family: 宋体; font-size: 10.5000pt;"><span style="font-family: 宋体;">刚刚过去的</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">23Fall</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">申请季，跨专业申请的</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">Y</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">学生收获了比较超出预期的成绩。作为体育类院校的新闻专业的学生，最终收获了美国和香港多枚理学硕士的</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">Offer</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">。很高兴看到</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">Y</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">同学实现了专业上的转型，今天就和大家分享一下从文科专业到</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">Tech</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">专业的文书准备过程，希望能够给大家一点小小的启发。</span></span></p>
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<div class="apply-item"><a class="college link" href="https://www.compassedu.hk/majr_65518" target="_blank" rel="noopener">罗切斯特大学商业分析硕士</a>
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<div class="value">2023-01-18</div>
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<div class="value">2023-01-20</div>
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<div class="value">2023-05-17</div>
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<div class="apply-item"><a class="college link" href="https://www.compassedu.hk/majr_62961" target="_blank" rel="noopener">香港中文大学体育科学与体育活动理学硕士</a>
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<p style="margin: 0pt 0pt 0.0001pt; font-family: Calibri; font-size: 10.5pt; text-align: justify;"><span class="h1">一、前期沟通，充分信任</span></p>
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<p style="margin: 0pt 0pt 0.0001pt; font-family: Calibri; font-size: 10.5pt; text-align: justify;"><span style="font-family: 宋体; font-size: 10.5000pt;"><span style="font-family: Calibri;">Y</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">同学来自北京体育大学的新闻专业。</span><strong><span style="font-family: Calibri;">GPA</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">排名比较好，</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">11</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">月签约后不久，就拿到了雅思</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">7.0</span></strong><span style="font-family: 宋体;"><strong>的成绩</strong>，为后续定校、文书准备和申请奠定了一个顺利的基础。</span></span></p>
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<p style="margin: 0pt 0pt 0.0001pt; font-family: Calibri; font-size: 10.5pt; text-align: justify;"><span style="font-family: 宋体; font-size: 10.5000pt;"><span style="font-family: 宋体;">经过初次和</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">Y</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">同学的沟通后我们了解到，</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">Y</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">同学高中是一名理科生，一直以来都对数学很有兴趣。高考报志愿时，由于长期以来对竞技体育抱有的热情，加之在中国，女生对运动的热爱比较低，运动的人和看运动的人都非常少，所以秉持着希望为中国体育事业奉献的精神，她选择了体育新闻专业。然而经过大一的学习，</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">Y</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">同学发现学校的课程设置比较偏文，上课时也没有非常硬技术的学习，这与她喜爱的理科背道而驰。此外，体育大学关于<strong>理学的选修课近乎为零</strong>，这使她很难接触到数学、计算机等领域的理工类课程。于是</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">Y</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">同学在大一大二的空闲时间，一直坚持自学高等数学、线性代数等课程，也始终希望能够在研究生阶段转回理科。</span></span></p>
<p style="margin: 0pt 0pt 0.0001pt; font-family: Calibri; font-size: 10.5pt; text-align: justify;"><span style="font-family: 宋体; font-size: 10.5000pt;"> </span></p>
<p style="margin: 0pt 0pt 0.0001pt; font-family: Calibri; font-size: 10.5pt; text-align: justify;"><span style="font-family: 宋体; font-size: 10.5000pt;"><span style="font-family: 宋体;">而由于缺乏本科四年的积淀，</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">Y</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">同学无法在研究生阶段学习理工基础要求程度很高的专业，而且她希望在未来从事更加实践性的工作，因此决定在研究生阶段申请商业分析项目，这也是现在十分热门的专业，十分适合文科转专业的同学。同时，出于对新闻的兴趣，</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">Y</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">同学也同时申请了有</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">Tech</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">方面课程设置的人工智能与数字媒体专业。</span></span></p>
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<p style="margin: 0pt 0pt 0.0001pt; font-family: Calibri; font-size: 10.5pt; text-align: justify;"><span class="h1">二、完善文书，助力成功</span></p>
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<p style="margin: 0pt 0pt 0.0001pt; font-family: Calibri; font-size: 10.5pt; text-align: justify;"><span style="font-family: 宋体; font-size: 10.5000pt;"><span style="font-family: 宋体;">决定好方向之后，售后老师与</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">Y</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">同学经过了充分的讨论，确定好了申请的项目和国家组合之后，我就开始了文书的准备。写作之前，我给</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">Y</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">同学<strong>发送了需要她填写的提纲</strong>，包括申请动机、学术经历、实习经历、职业规划等几个版块。</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">Y</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">同学十分配合，在约定好的时间内将填写好的提纲发送给了我，非常详细地阐述了自己的想法。之后，我与</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">Y</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">同学进行了一次语音头脑风暴，就整个</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">PS</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">的提纲进行了<strong>逻辑线的梳理</strong>。</span></span></p>
<p style="margin: 0pt 0pt 0.0001pt; font-family: Calibri; font-size: 10.5pt; text-align: justify;"><span style="font-family: 宋体; font-size: 10.5000pt;"> </span></p>
<p style="margin: 0pt 0pt 0.0001pt; font-family: Calibri; font-size: 10.5pt; text-align: justify;"><span style="font-family: 宋体; font-size: 10.5000pt;"><span style="font-family: 宋体;">作为转专业的学生，文书当中最难写、同时也是十分重要的版块，就是申请的动机。申请动机的合理性是除了硬三维之外一个比较关键的因素之一，招生官会依此来判断你是不是真的对这个专业感兴趣。同时，<strong>动机最好需要和学生自身的经历结合，找到一个比较有说服力的切入点，而不能从专业本身的前景泛泛而谈。</strong></span></span></p>
<p style="margin: 0pt 0pt 0.0001pt; font-family: Calibri; font-size: 10.5pt; text-align: justify;"><span style="font-family: 宋体; font-size: 10.5000pt;"> </span></p>
<p style="margin: 0pt 0pt 0.0001pt; font-family: Calibri; font-size: 10.5pt; text-align: justify;"><span style="font-family: 宋体; font-size: 10.5000pt;"><span style="font-family: 宋体;">以罗切斯特大学西蒙商学院商业分析专业的文书为例，结合</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">Y</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">同学的个人背景和经历，以及她个人的想法，选择了如下的切入点：</span></span></p>
<p style="margin: 0pt 0pt 0.0001pt; font-family: Calibri; font-size: 10.5pt; text-align: justify;"><span style="font-family: 宋体; font-size: 10.5000pt;"><span style="font-family: Calibri;">1. </span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">结合冬奥会的热点，以及谷爱凌展现出的“</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">help girls connect with sports</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">”的形象，</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">Y</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">同学表明了自己当初也是抱着这样想提升女性在竞技体育行业的参与度的想法，选择了体育大学的新闻专业（某种程度上体现美国学校很喜欢看到的</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">diversity</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">）；</span></span></p>
<p style="margin: 0pt 0pt 0.0001pt; font-family: Calibri; font-size: 10.5pt; text-align: justify;"><span style="font-family: 宋体; font-size: 10.5000pt;"> </span></p>
<p style="margin: 0pt 0pt 0.0001pt; font-family: Calibri; font-size: 10.5pt; text-align: justify;"><span style="font-family: 宋体; font-size: 10.5000pt;"><span style="font-family: Calibri;">2. </span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">在如今这个数据驱动的世界里，新闻领域被技术颠覆了。在大二的一门课中，了解到了“数据新闻”的概念，在这门课的结课项目中，因为缺乏数据提取和可视化工具的技能，最终没有能够做出令自己很满意的成果，这对</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">Y</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">同学来说是一个遗憾，并且激发了在数据分析方面接受进一步教育的愿望（初次产生转专业的想法）；</span></span></p>
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<p style="margin: 0pt 0pt 0.0001pt; font-family: Calibri; font-size: 10.5pt; text-align: justify;"><span style="font-family: 宋体; font-size: 10.5000pt;"><span style="font-family: Calibri;">3. </span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">大三期间，</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">Y</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">同学参与了一个交流项目，与来自不同专业、年级、国家的学生和老师一起生活和学习，互相影响。在这段经历中，</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">Y</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">同学参与了体育赛事管理、体育品牌管理与营销等多个课程，感受到了数据分析在体育行业的应用，如</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">......</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">。这段经历让</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">Y</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">同学找到了未来想要从事的职业，决定攻读商业分析硕士，利用自己的跨学科知识有所作为。（加深动机，同时将数据分析和体育、商业都结合起来，确定职业规划）。</span></span></p>
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<p style="margin: 0pt 0pt 0.0001pt; font-family: Calibri; font-size: 10.5pt; text-align: justify;"><span style="font-family: 宋体; font-size: 10.5000pt;"><span style="font-family: Calibri;">4. </span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">为了获得一些数据相关的实践，</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">Y</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">同学从大二暑假开始进行了共三段实习，掌握了一些常用软件的基本技能，比如</span><span style="font-family: Calibri;">SPSS, Python, MySQL, Tableau</span><span style="font-family: 宋体;">等。（体现自己所做的准备）</span></span></p>
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<p style="margin: 0pt 0pt 0.0001pt; font-family: Calibri; font-size: 10.5pt; text-align: justify;"><span style="font-family: 宋体; font-size: 10.5000pt;"><span style="font-family: 宋体;">总结下来，整体的逻辑主线仍然不脱离自己对体育行业的热情，只是参与的方式从媒体领域转变成了商业领域。在结合自身经历阐述申请动机的同时，通过实习展现自己所作的努力和积累，也表明自己认识到自己现有的知识和技能储备还不足以实现职业目标，所以决心通过商业分析的研究生进一步深造。这样就形成了一篇比较完整的个人陈述。</span></span></p>
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<p style="margin: 0pt 0pt 0.0001pt; font-family: Calibri; font-size: 10.5pt; text-align: justify;"><span class="h1">三、最终申请，双向奔赴</span></p>
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