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【心动的文书】如何构思PS的主线?
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指南者留学 徐萍(Fiona) 2023年03月29日 阅读量:3115
<p style="text-align: justify;">如果说细节描述是PS的血肉,那么一个好的逻辑框架就是PS的骨架,二者共同铸就了一篇有血有肉的个人陈述。如何构思PS的主线?今天<strong>#心动的文书#</strong>栏目,就以一个学生的案例跟大家分享三个PS主线的构思方法。<strong>(下划线加粗为好词好句,大家可以收藏积累哦~)</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><span class="h1">01 角度一:专业知识</span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">Is finance valuable as a discipline? During my first two undergraduate years, a large number of courses pertinent to math, computers, and economics once <strong><span style="text-decoration: underline;">cast doubt on</span></strong> the value of finance for me.</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【本科前两年大量非金融相关的课程让「我」开始质疑金融作为一门学科的价值】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">It was not until my junior year when I was extensively exposed to finance courses covering various aspects of the financial market that I began to recognize the appeal of finance. Especially in the two courses named Corporate Finance and Investment Banking, I <span style="text-decoration: underline;"><strong>marveled at</strong></span> the value that finance could create for firms and its close connections with all walks of life.</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【大三金融课程的相关学习使「我」对金融的魅力有了更多的理解】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">To advance my knowledge of finance, I proactively participated in a simulated roadshow for a prestigious food and beverage company - Bestore...... At the end of this roadshow, I <strong><span style="text-decoration: underline;">got a better handle on</span></strong> the latest theoretical developments and practical applications in the corporate finance field as well as the implications of corporate finance within a global context.</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【从研究经历中得到的对企业金融的理解】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">My internship at Great Wall Fund Management Co., Ltd. <span style="text-decoration: underline;"><strong>enlightened me on</strong></span> the complexity and diversity of the financial market......</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【通过实习经历对金融市场的复杂性和多样性有了更深的理解】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">With an increasing knowledge of finance, I no longer doubt its value as a discipline but have developed an unbridled passion for <strong><span style="text-decoration: underline;">embarking on a career</span></strong> in this <span style="text-decoration: underline;"><strong>fast-evolving and intellectually challenging</strong></span> realm. To be specific, I aspire to work in the Investment Banking Department of a HK securities company......</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【随着对金融了解的深入,不再怀疑其作为一门学科的价值,反而想要在这个领域有所建树】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">I am sure that undertaking this programme will continuously <span style="text-decoration: underline;"><strong>update my comprehension of</strong></span> financial expertise and the global financial market. In the future, I will spare no effort to publicize the leading-edge advances in the finance industry so that more people can hold a correct attitude towards the subject of finance.</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【未来想要传播金融领域的前沿发展成果,让更多的人对金融这门学科持有正确的态度】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <ul> <li style="text-align: justify;">思路:</li> </ul> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">该PS用一句&ldquo;Is finance valuable as a discipline?&rdquo;开头,<strong>下文围绕着「我」对于金融这门学科的逐渐深入的了解来写的</strong>,主线为:质疑金融作为一门学科的价值&rarr;从专业课中开始感受到金融的魅力&rarr;从研究经历中了解到企业金融的最新发展和实际运用&rarr;从实习经历中理解了金融市场的复杂性和多样性&rarr;不再怀疑金融作为一门学科的价值,反而想要在这个领域有所建树&rarr;未来想要更多人了解金融这门学科。</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><span class="h1">02 角度二:职业目标</span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">As a finance major, I aspire to work in the Investment Banking Department of a HK securities company......</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【「我」的职业目标】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">As a goal-oriented student, I have made continuous endeavors to fulfill my career goals. Academically, I&rsquo;m equipped with a <strong><span style="text-decoration: underline;">well-grounded</span></strong> mathematical foundation......</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【为了实现职业目标,「我」做了持续的努力。比如学术方面&hellip;&hellip;】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">Practically, I practised my financial expertise through relevant research projects. A noteworthy experience was a simulated roadshow for a prestigious food and beverage company - Bestore......</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【实践方面,「我」也通过相关的研究项目来实践自己的金融知识】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">To further comprehend the financial market and hone my hands-on financial skills, I entered Great Wall Fund Management Co., Ltd. this year. As a sales intern, I ......</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【为了进一步了解金融市场以及锻炼金融实践能力,「我」进入XX公司实习】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">Nevertheless, the expertise I have developed from these experiences is not sufficient enough for me to climb higher up my future career ladder. To reach my goals, I need further improvements in......, which can be achieved by undertaking the XX program......</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【从这些经历中获得的专业能力不足以支撑「我」的职业发展,「我」需要在&hellip;&hellip;方面有更多的改善】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <ul> <li style="text-align: justify;">思路:</li> </ul> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">该主线为:「我」的职业目标&rarr;为了实现这个职业目标,「我」在学业和实践方面做出的努力&rarr;这些努力还不足以实现自己的职业目标,「我」还需要在XX方面有进一步的提高。</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><span class="h1">03 角度三:能力提升</span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">My decision to pursue further studies in finance was made during the simulated roadshow for a prestigious food and beverage company - Bestore......Despite the valuable skills I acquired during this project, it particularly <strong><span style="text-decoration: underline;">highlighted my insufficiency in</span></strong> XX, motivating me to embrace a higher degree in finance.</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【在给良品铺子做增发路演时,「我」发现自己在XX方面的不足,所以决定深入学习金融专业】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">The XX program initially attracted me for its......</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【这个专业吸引我的地方在于&hellip;&hellip;】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">To prepare for the challenges in my postgraduate journey, I have made continuous endeavors to reinforce my financial competency. Academically, I&rsquo;m equipped with a <strong><span style="text-decoration: underline;">well-grounded</span></strong> mathematical foundation......</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【为了迎接研究生生涯的各种挑战,「我」做了持续的努力。比如学术方面&hellip;&hellip;】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">Practically, I practised my financial expertise through the internship at Great Wall Fund Management Co., Ltd. As a sales intern, I ...... This internship enlightened me on the appeal of financial practitioners, who frequently exchange their knowledge of asset values and market laws in the context of capital flows during each transaction. It is in this collision of ideas that the financial industry is constantly developing and innovating, driving me to actualize my worth in this fantastic field.</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【实践方面,「我」进入XX公司实习。这个实习让我意识到金融从业者的魅力】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">My career goals are clearly <strong><span style="text-decoration: underline;">blueprinted</span></strong>. Specifically, I aspire to work in the Investment Banking Department of a HK securities company......</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【「我」的职业目标】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <ul> <li style="text-align: justify;">思路:</li> </ul> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">该主线为:「我」在给良品铺子做增发路演时发现自己的不足&rarr;想要通过XX专业提升自己的专业能力&rarr;为了迎接研究生生涯的挑战,「我」在学业和实践方面做了持续的努力。</p>
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